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U is for Under
This was my entry for Microcosms Fiction flash fiction competition on the 3rd of February. The prompt was: song title: If only I had a match/ genre: romance. The prompt had something to do with a singer/songwriter.
For those new to my blog: Twisted Tale Tuesday is where I share flash fiction pieces I’ve written for various competitions and online platforms. Here I not only share the story, but also the thoughts behind it. Enjoy.
Under an Immortal Moon
By Ronel Janse van Vuuren
Light glinted off the broken glass littering the veld. In the distance a pair of plovers were screeching at passers-by.
It was the perfect setting for a romantic picnic.
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I had thought to change the title to “up in flames” but I thought “under an immortal moon” is more romantic. I listened to Madonna’s American Pie because of something in the theme about the day that music died – I used the veld, the broken glass, the attack by birds as my own reference to the song’s lyrics.
In South Africa we have different types of plovers, some crazy enough to think they can live side-by-side with Rottweilers… and they always protect their land. Oh, we also call the grassland veld. Not sure what the rest of you would call it…
Judge’s favourite line: ‘If I had a match, I’d show you flames,’ Mark muttered as Joan cried.
What do you think? Did you like the twist? Anything you’d change about the story? I always appreciate feedback, so leave your thoughts in the comments.
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Arti said:
The judge’s favourite line does pack a mighty punch. The twist makes me want to find out what happens next.
I like the title, Under an Immortal Moon.
U is for Uttarakhand
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miladyronel said:
Thanks, Arti 🙂
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hilarymb said:
Hi Ronel – love the title and the appreciation of the setting … and then the twist – I’d like to know more … cheers Hilary
http://positiveletters.blogspot.co.uk/2017/04/u-is-for-unicorn.html
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miladyronel said:
Thanks, Hilary 🙂
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jazzfeathers said:
What a strange little story. But I liked it 🙂
@JazzFeathers
The Old Shelter – 1940s Film Noir
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miladyronel said:
Thanks, Sarah 🙂
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Keith's Ramblings said:
Just love the final line! A brilliant tale.
Another day in Amble Bay!
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miladyronel said:
Thanks, Keith 🙂
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Marna Reed said:
I couldn’t pretend either. A millennium is too long to wear a mask. I’d be so cynical…more cynical than I am now. Heh. 😛
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miladyronel said:
Playing games can only be fun for so long…
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Louise@DragonspireUK said:
Nice piece 🙂 I think my favourite line was ‘Light glinted off the broken glass littering the veld,’ although I do like the judge’s favourite line too!
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miladyronel said:
Thanks, Louise 🙂
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