, , , , , , , , , ,

U is for Under

This was my entry for Microcosms Fiction flash fiction competition on the 3rd of February.  The prompt was: song title: If only I had a match/ genre: romance. The prompt had something to do with a singer/songwriter.

For those new to my blog: Twisted Tale Tuesday is where I share flash fiction pieces I’ve written for various competitions and online platforms. Here I not only share the story, but also the thoughts behind it. Enjoy.

Under an Immortal Moon

By Ronel Janse van Vuuren


Light glinted off the broken glass littering the veld. In the distance a pair of plovers were screeching at passers-by.

It was the perfect setting for a romantic picnic.

To read this story and others like it, get Twisted Tales now. https://www.books2read.com/u/m2v961

Twenty-four flash fiction tales filled with folklore and mythology, creeping in on the edges of nightmares, and twisting around the various sub-genres of fantasy.

I had thought to change the title to “up in flames” but I thought “under an immortal moon” is more romantic. I listened to Madonna’s American Pie because of something in the theme about the day that music died – I used the veld, the broken glass, the attack by birds as my own reference to the song’s lyrics.

In South Africa we have different types of plovers, some crazy enough to think they can live side-by-side with Rottweilers… and they always protect their land. Oh, we also call the grassland veld. Not sure what the rest of you would call it…

Judge’s favourite line: ‘If I had a match, I’d show you flames,’ Mark muttered as Joan cried.

What do you think? Did you like the twist? Anything you’d change about the story? I always appreciate feedback, so leave your thoughts in the comments.

Sign up for my newsletter and receive a free ebook. I won’t share your information and I’ll only email you once a month with updates on new releases, special offers, and a bit of news.