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I is for Idiocy

This was my entry for Cracked Flash Fiction Competition on the 4th of February. It also won Honourable Mention 🙂 The prompt was: ‘Try a different one.’

For those new to my blog: Twisted Tale Tuesday is where I share flash fiction pieces I’ve written for various competitions and online platforms. Here I not only share the story, but also the thoughts behind it. Enjoy.

Idiocy

By Ronel Janse van Vuuren

‘Try a different one. Come on!’ Maggie urged, trippling in place.

‘I already did! The chimera is just too strong!’ Danielle watched the monster in dismay.

Lava squirted at the two of them from the terrifying creature’s maw, barely missing them as a ricocheting spell zapped the chimera in the eye.

‘I’m too young to die!’ Maggie neighed.

‘Seriously? Pull yourself together, centaur. We’re not dying today.’

Danielle pulled out a bag of berries and cheese, whispered a spell and threw the food at the chimera.

‘Run!’

As the terrifying beast ate their lunch, juice and lava flying everywhere, the centaur and sorceress fled the mountainside.

‘Not. A. Word.’ Danielle said. If any of the others found out that they’d gone to the Lair of Monsters, they’d be ridiculed and then severely punished.

‘Agreed,’ Maggie whinnied.

While writing this, I listened to Bon Jovi’s Blaze of Glory playing in my head – yeah, earworms are rather inspiring when not irritating the hell out of you. Again, I wrote this before my morning coffee – sometimes good things happen in that haze before waking up. Oh, for those of you who think I’m crazy using “trippling”: it’s a South African word used for horses when they “tripple from left to right on the trail”, “anxiously move their legs” and so on. I felt it fitting for a centaur.

So, what do you think? Anything you’d change about this piece? Feedback is always welcome, leave your thoughts in the comments.

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